I'm sorry that I have to leave a negative reply but I don't think you should be writing in English (if it is indeed your second language, which it seems to be) if you do not yet understand that "I" has to be capitalized and how to use past, present, and f
Please comment and vote all criticism will be greatly appreciated. -Josiah Sellstrom
A great story, sorry but I cannot offer very much constructive criticism seeing as you are a much better writer than I am. So I'll just write compliments. I liked the way you described the scenery, the amount of excruciating detail you put into describing
Hey great story Mrs. Leavitt, it actually made me tear up a little bit this time. I think you have whittled it down to the point where it is just right. If it can emotionally effect me then it must be something powerful indeed aye?