loril

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  • loril Apr 12th
    Dane's Steer (Inspirational)
    loril
    7 comments
    28th Mar 2012

    Thanks so much for your comment! It makes me cry, too... But that's because it's a true story.

  • loril Apr 12th
    Tom Grilligan (Fiction)
    jls685
    4 comments
    11th Apr 2012

    Great story Josiah. I love your voice and the mood it sets for the character and story. Keep writing!!

  • loril Apr 4th
    Wonder If? (Inspirational)
    geedda
    4 comments
    2nd Apr 2012

    I appreciate your effort but I've heard most of these one-liners before. Don't think it works for a short story... A bit too long to keep my interest.

  • loril Apr 2nd
    Dane's Steer (Inspirational)
    loril
    7 comments
    28th Mar 2012

    Thank you for your comment. Reading it over now, I'm thinking that the beginning is too long and drawn out, having very little to do with the story. What are your thoughts? Do you think it should be changed?

  • loril Mar 28th
    Notice Things, They Change You (Others)
    weseektheomissions
    7 comments
    27th Jan 2012

    I love the message of this story. It is far better to focus on the good things in life than to always look at the bad--even when we have to look hard for them. Life is so much richer than our daily existance often reveals.

loril

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