Hey great story Mrs. Leavitt, it actually made me tear up a little bit this time. I think you have whittled it down to the point where it is just right. If it can emotionally effect me then it must be something powerful indeed aye?

According to me, the beginning shouldn't be altered as it is creating an ambiance which is the best way to start with any story, nd u have done it nicely.

Excellent story, I too was touched by its ending...Great job

Thats indeed an interesting writing and have a very different storyline. No doubt, It made me little emotional too in the end. I would like to appreciate your style and approach of describing the whole event. Great story!!!!

I read all story very good.. Good job Mr. loril