George, I like your smooth flowing style of tale telling. I enjoyed your story! UThaker
Hello Surabhi, I liked your story! - Opening was good - Liked the end with a honest words of wisdom - Character seems real - Your tale telling flows well! If you want to make it a fictionalized short story (over 5,000 words), I recommend conside
What a beautiful poetry in form of a prose! I lived a five year old and felt a mother of five year old. You are a story teller!
I absolutely love your writing style and as I have said before you are unstoppable in your humour:) - Utpal
Your story is crisp, characters are real and above all you are unstoppable with your wit. You are a natural storyteller and humour is your strength. -UThaker